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Lindsay Bock from:
North Allegheny
- posted: October 30, 2007
Edye, what could I possibly say to describe this poem? I feel any comment would not be able to do justice to the amount of brilliance put into this piece.
You are no doubt unbelievably talented in every piece of writing that you do, and this poem serves that fact well.
The enjambment and end stop are fascinating, where you put each.
Your use of colorful language and descriptive adjectives are fitting as well.
I love you dear!
Merit O'Hare from:
North Allegheny
- posted: October 30, 2007
Edye--as always, stunning!
There are too many lines that I love for me to pick just a few. My favorite part is from "but in Japan..." to "...dotted lines in the sky", but it's an all-around awesome idea coupled with some great wordplay and insights. Flow is good, line breaks are good...
...fantastic job.
Bryan Hogg from:
North Allegheny
- posted: October 31, 2007
Not to sound repetative, but I have to agree with everyone else-another fantastic poem Edye. I love the beginning especially, when you mention how even sunsets and dawns have become complex and a bit overwhelming. It's a fantastic look on modern culture and how something as simple as nature and a sunset has to be stressful. The frantic tone of the poem also adds to the overall effect. Great job.
Brett Schindler from:
North Allegheny
- posted: October 31, 2007
Edye this is pretty good. All your poems are so good. I like how you described the complexity of everything. Good job, you are very talented
